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Post by sapphiresmoke on Feb 24, 2009 15:02:10 GMT -5
Here's your challenge: Write a poem on this painting. There is no length requirement. The deadline is March 10th. The poems may be posted here. Have at it!
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Post by Endovia on Feb 24, 2009 21:01:36 GMT -5
I tried the link but it says access is forbidden.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Feb 24, 2009 23:30:25 GMT -5
Hmph. It worked earlier. I'll just put the picture there instead.
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Post by Endovia on Feb 25, 2009 20:02:27 GMT -5
Oh, wow. That's a beautiful painting.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Feb 26, 2009 12:50:20 GMT -5
I know, isn't it? I found it on Google, hehe. Let's see if it inspires any brilliance from us.
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Post by Axle on Feb 27, 2009 23:24:22 GMT -5
I watch the news;
pictures of desolation running through my eyes, filling my head with thought not worthy of the effort.
Frozen and numb, the world sees nothing.
We dare not speak the very words that would free us.
Through scars of hate we feel no pain, apathy our morphine.
No one cries out in repentance anymore, for right and wrong bleed together now.
In this world of only gray, moral ambiguity. God looks upon His children, no tears left.
We have no tears save our first, the rest we borrow from the saints and angels.
Okay peoples, this is my first stab at poetry. Please be gentle when you critique.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Feb 28, 2009 14:25:09 GMT -5
Thanks, Axle. We'll all give comments on March 10th, when all the poems are in.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Mar 2, 2009 13:43:10 GMT -5
The Watcher
A frozen waste Torn by bleeding hearts A scar across the sky The wizened Watcher Waiting patiently As ancient memories die The past a fading myth
Children laughed then Swinging and climbing Sharing the first fruits of Spring As the Watcher looked on Gently smiling down Their innocence lifeblood The Watcher thrived
Echoes from long ago The children grew And left the Watcher alone Their innocence turned To adult importance No more to laugh and dance Beneath the cerulean sky
An invisible tear Dropping to the snow One last gift to give Branches for firewood Sap for nourishment Life for life
The ancient Watcher gone No trace left behind But a print on the snow The land left empty and alone A frozen waste Torn by bleeding hearts A scar across the sky
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Mar 6, 2009 23:52:26 GMT -5
Four days left! Don't let Axle and I be the only ones who wrote anything!
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Post by ~Beauty~ on Mar 9, 2009 23:13:18 GMT -5
I'm submitting mine tomorrow!
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Mar 10, 2009 10:56:21 GMT -5
Better post quick, Beauty... Deadline's today.
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Post by ~Beauty~ on Mar 10, 2009 16:51:17 GMT -5
I see three lives Separated by one simple choice Defined by what was gained Tortured by what was lost
The first life bathes in the light or glory She said yes instead of no Though sometimes she cries at night For she is forever alone
The second lives on the streets He is lost and not found He never has felt alone For God is on his side
The third life is different She knows what went wrong Instead of dwelling on the past She reaches for the future
I saw three lives Separated by their choices Each deciding their path Only one was willing to move on.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Mar 11, 2009 10:30:27 GMT -5
Challenge 1 is over. Please comment on any/all poems.
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Post by sapphiresmoke on Mar 11, 2009 12:49:55 GMT -5
Axle - That's really beautiful, in a sad kind of way. I love the imagery. The rhythm was hard to follow, especially in the format you posted in. Try to even out the number of syllables, and maybe post in the typical poetry format, line by line. For a first try at poetry, that was wonderful! I'm curious, though... How did the painting inspire that theme from you?
Beauty - Very nicely done, as we usually see from you. The rhythm felt a little off, though. You started with one rhythm, then switched. Still followable (that's not a word, is it?), but a little awkward. I love how you tell three different stories in the one poem. Very much like the painting.
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Post by ~Beauty~ on Mar 11, 2009 15:16:58 GMT -5
haha thank you Sappire, eh I'm always a lil off! lol
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